Tuesday, March 22, 2011

Trees Weeping

Dreamed of phantom thoughts and rocks
A perfume pallet of broken clocks
Smokey desert's sun ablaze
With midnight birds lost in the days
And I could not tell light from down
Gem mountains floating all around
Trees weeping for their lost starfish
On falling waves, I made my wish
That rubies would all still be blue
And I could sing like opals do
The sapphire sky would drop its net
And capture all that I'd forget.

11 comments:

  1. Great poem. Even the rhyme works!

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  2. ha. love the rhyme...and the short alliteration in the second verse...trees weeping fo their starfish...nice one shot

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  3. I enjoyed the contrasting images of each line. Excellent Rhyming, great finish. Way Cool!!!

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  4. Love the last two lines especially.

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  5. Dear Miriam
    Beautiful... I enjoyed it all.. great rhyme.

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/03/whispers-seed-and-senseless-living.html
    At Twitter @VerseEveryDay

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  6. Thank you all SO very much! I appreciate your kind comments

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  7. Thank you so much Mz Bszzzz :-)Sweet as honey

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  8. Outstanding..truly a heart grabber

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  9. Thank you so much! I am pleased to tell you that this has been chosen as a submission in a book coming out in the fall (Oct) called "Inspiration Speaks" - a book of art, mingled with poetry. I am so excited!

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